Finaly… weeeeee… ^^

August 30, 2008 | Uncategorized

~I know its been FOREVER since I said I would post it, but here’s chap 2 for Coal Wars.

I stared at the small puddle. I’m sure my expression was some mixture of anger, and amazement. I couldn’t believe it. That was the largest pond in the entire forest. Susan slowly backed toward me and ran up to my head. “Oh Rosy, what are we going to do?” I inhaled a sharp breath. I was fed up. I quickly turned and headed north to the heart of our forest. I was running on all fours to get there faster. “We’re going to talk to the elders about this; this is getting out of hand and something has to be done about it.” I scampered across a pasture surrounded by trees. I turned a sharp left and headed back into the forest. “But first we need to tell the others about this.” I could feel her nod her small round head. We soon burst out of the brush once more, but instead of a pasture, a large field of dirt lay ahead of us. A rockhopper had stopped digging and was standing, staring in our direction with his gray eyes. I smiled inwardly. He always knew I was comming.

I skidded to a holt a few inches from him. “Whats wrong, Rose. You seem uneasy; your breathing is irregular and your heartbeat has increased to.” I sighed and befor I could explain, Susan started. “Rosy had saved me this morning and we went to get something to drink at Spearow pond, but its all dryed up! Its just a small puddle now!” her cute voice annouced. She grabbed the attention of the rest of the Rockhoppers around us. I nodded. “Artek, we need to go get the others and do something about this.”

“You mean the elders?” he asked. “Yes,” I said in a grave tone. He sighed himself and turned around and sniffed the air a few times. “Let me go tell Ma I’m leaving,” he said, running down into the maze of holes.

Artek was one of my best friends. He was a Burrow Rockhopper, also known as Digger and Meerkat Rockhoppers. He had a family of 34 and they were the largest clan of Burrow Rockhoppers in the area. Another family lived a few miles from here, but came every once and awhile to talk to Artek’s family. Artek had short pointed ears that went down and long feet. His paws were brown at the tips and he had strips on his back and ears. He had short hair on his head and chest and a long slinder tail. His eyes were also rounded by dark brown to protect them from the sun. I sighed. I’ve always loved Artek’s eyes, even after they turned clowdy and gray. Susan was humming a tune on my head. Her squeeky little voice echoed through her throught as she hummed a familiar tune. I could put down the words.

“If only, If only,” the woodpecker sighs,

The bark on the trees was as soft as the sky’s.

The wolf waits below, hungry and lonely,

Howling to the moon “If only, If only.”

My thoughts of the song were interrupted as I was rammed into the ground. “Ouch!” I looked up to see Artek on top of me. We both blushed and got up. “Sorry… I couldn’t smell you fast enough. I was running. My ma said yes, so I was excited…” “Mm hm,” I moaned, understanding. He wouldn’t have known I was standing right there. “My fault,” I said reassuringly to Artek, who still looked apologetic. Susan, who had flown off my head ran over to us and climbed on my head again. “How come I always have to carry you along, Susan?” I said accusingly at the small squirrel-like creature on my head. “Because, you run faster then me, and your head is comfy.” I sighed at her logic. “C’mon, we better get the others. Lead the way,” I nodded and started off north again, this time with Artek behind me. I looked back every once and awhile to make sure he was Ok. I still don’t know why I did though, because he knew every inch of this forest better then I did. His feet were longer then his paws, so he bounced when he ran on all fours. I found this funny, but right now I had to get the others.

We later saw them about a quarter of a mile later, all leaning over to look down a ditch. I skidded to a halt a few feet behind them. Artek heard me stop and bounced beside me. Katie was the first to notice our entrance. “Rosy? Artek? Oh guy’s, I’m sooo glad to see you both!” She pulled us into a tight hug and Susan quickly hopped onto her head. Or-Tal and Crow looked back as well. Crow sighed at Katie’s giddiness. His black wings covered his back as he turned his back to look down at the ditch. I walked over to him, Artek and Katie at my side. Susan now rested on Katie’s head, always preferring her over me when possible. I looked down the ditch as well and sighed. “I don’t smell any water,” stated Artek. “That’s because there is none,” exclaimed Or-Tal, who was at Crow’s left side. Her voice was dull and flat like she didn’t care. You could tell she did though. She just always sounded like that. Katie sighed. “She’s right. It used to be a lake. There’s nothing left. What are we going to do? Its only going to get worse…” Her voice drifted off. She was right. First the water would go, then the plants would die. Food would be hard to find, and eventually, we would all be fighting each other for scraps. I sighed. I had been doing a lot of that lately. “Were going to see the elders,” I said. They all nodded, even Crow, without hesitation. We turned, and I led them into the heart of the forest.

Hope you all like it. Comment so I cant talk to ya all!

Katie-Greek: Pure Or-Tal-Hebrew: Morning dew Artek-Gaelic: Possibly bear or stone

I’m going to try and get mom to scan pictures of the characters, so don’t freak if you cant figure out how they look. I’m going to post the next one by Monday, I promise!

P.S Can any of you see something speacil about Artek? Five points if you can!

Love ya,

kisses! =3~

  1. 7 Responses to “Finaly… weeeeee… ^^”

  2. Is it Artek’s eyes?? Or may the fact that he can know that Rosy is coming before she ever gets there??

    Keep writing, Jordan. There are mistakes, of course. Mistakes that a good editor would point out and clean up.

    By mother on Aug 31, 2008

  3. Here is my response. I will be able to read it if/when you fix all the paragraphs and make it easier for me to read. I don’t have the brain capacity to break it down. kisses!

    By carmen on Sep 3, 2008

  4. took you long enough! i had to go back and read chapter 1 because i’d forgotten what it was about. i think it’s good. most of the problems are just grammatical or editing errors. otherwise, the story itself is good and has me interested. i would guess that the special thing about Artek is that he’s blind. You said his eyes use to be brown and then turned gray, he has to smell people to know they are there, and rosie worries about him running through the forest (even though she knows it’s unneccessary).

    By maria on Sep 4, 2008

  5. Hey, Jordan, I thought I’d chime in about one thing:

    I’ve got a new hobby: learning Ancient Greek. Not so long ago, anyone who was “educated” was expected to know Ancient Greek and Latin, as you probably know, so I’ve bought a bunch of books and spend a good portion of my time every day trying to learn. It’s a very hard language, probably as tough as English.

    Anyway, I noticed that you said that “Katie” is from the Greek for “pure,” so I thought I’d like it up.

    Sure enough, you are right!

    The Ancient Greek verb κᾰθαρεύω (transliterated from the Greek alphabet: kathare-U-o) – if you can’t see that don’t worry about it, not all browsers will show the characters correctly.

    It means “to be pure.” That word is the origin of the name Katherine (in English), and of course Katie is a nickname for Katherine.

    GOOD JOB!

    By bill on Sep 4, 2008

  6. Artek usually relies more on smell rather than vision to get around.

    I like your ‘If only, if only’ song

    By Bud on Sep 4, 2008

  7. ~Yeah, I looked up some names on this baby name website and it lets you choose what origins you want. I wanted my characters to have secret meanings to the names. If you want to find it, just go to Google and type ‘boy names’ Look down and it should have a link that says around 1200 baby names, origins, and stuff like that.

    Also, I thought this might have been a bit easier. Artek is blind. You’ll find out why later in the story. So keep reading!~ ;)

    By jordan on Sep 4, 2008

  8. Jordan, I asked if it was Artek’s eyes? And you confirmed that he (she?) is blind.

    By mother on Sep 5, 2008

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