Comments on: Coal wars Chapter 1

By: jordan

jordan — Fri, 18 Jul 2008 20:13:52 +0000

~I’ve already drawn Susan. She is called an Unosquirl, because they have one ear on the tops of their heads. Males are yellow and females are usually light brown. They are also called Seasonwsquirls because females coats change depending on the weather. I’ve drawn both male and female Unosquirl, most of the rockhoppers, and One of the dragons, Ivy the poison dragon. She looks awesome. I would post the pictures, but i don’t know how. If anyone knows tell me.

By: mother

mother — Fri, 11 Jul 2008 04:06:05 +0000

I just read it again, Jordan. When are we going to get a second chapter. Maybe after the reunion? You’ll be back in school, then. I really want you to do a lot of writing. You already read a lot, and that’s a big plus for anyone aspiring to be a writer.

By: maria

maria — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 19:35:01 +0000

Wow! Great job. Better than anything I can write.

By: mother

mother — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 02:55:11 +0000

I have a bright idea!! Draw some of the creatures, and take them to the reunion. You can display them as your talent!
Well, it was only an idea. If you draw them, nobody over here knows how to take the pictures and, well, you know, do what has to be done to …….etc. Just bring some to the reunion.

By: mother

mother — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 02:51:11 +0000

Jordan, you should draw pictures of your creatures. You certainly have the talent to be your own illustrator. You describe them so beautifully that I can almost see them.

By: ben

ben — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 15:47:56 +0000

If you have some pictures of the creatures you should post them.

your story has some nice visual elements Jordan. Keep it up!

By: mother

mother — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 03:16:06 +0000

Yes, how does Susan look? Is she a little squirrel? I’m already intrigued in the story. Write us more.

By: jordan

jordan — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 02:23:44 +0000

~Just to let you all know, most of my creatures are made up. so i will describe some of them as best as i can for you.

rock hoppers are creatures that come in many species, but their general structure is mostly the same. picture a small dog with a small, slim body with a rounder head about as big as the head of a cat, an about one to two inch snout, round paws and long dot eyes.(its a cartoon, so think cartoon) though there are many different types.
Fuzzy(Rosalin),rock,elder(they become elder after a special ceremony), ice, moon,sun,star,bug trap,round,lightning,book,and so on. for example, the fuzzy rock hopper is pretty much a dog looking thing with a long pointed tail and ears. the reason they are called fuzzy is because they have fuzz showing at the base of their ears,tail,and ankles; while a star rock hopper is indigo and dark blue with shooting star ears and a star shaped tail. if you’d like to ask how Susan or anyone else looks like, ask in a comment and i will give you a description.~